17 Responses to Unearth | Chapter 3 Page 88

  1. Erik Van Thienen says:

    “Arrêtez, ou Monsieur Philo vous défiera pour un duel !”

    • Yakumo says:

      Probably need a descriptor more than the name- “Knock it off or the person who cannot speak French at all will challenge you to a duel.”

    • mvandinter says:

      Ha! Yes, and then Godfrey would have to teach Philo how to issue the challenge in French as well.

      • Yakumo says:

        Well, it’s a bit tired now, but wasn’t it still known in the Victorian era? Walk up and remove a glove, or vice versa, and then slap the other guy with said glove on each cheek.

        • Erik Van Thienen says:

          Only between aristocrats. If you were a commoner you just got stabbed for looking at them in the wrong way.

  2. Shan says:

    Put your ladder down
    Put your ladder down
    Put your ladder down

    Don’t be concerned


  3. Wyvern says:

    “It might be prudent for you and Miss Charlotte to stay down here…”

    Too late!

    Also, typo alert: the correct spelling is emissary.

  4. Hornet says:

    I don’t think this really fits Charlotte’s personality.

    • mvandinter says:

      I’m open to constructive criticism. What’s your reasoning, Hornet?

      • Hornet says:

        She just hasn’t seamed that concern with such things before, she’s just seamed more of the Laura Croft to Alice’s Martha Steward.

      • mvandinter says:

        Hornet, I made a few dialogue changes… to shift the tone more in the direction of humor. Let me know what you think.

  5. Thorin Schmidt says:

    I like the new dialogue!
    *looks at it again*

    although now “scenario” isn’t spelled right…

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